User blog comment:Androyd09/Slicer/@comment-2250991-20101130230118

I know how rough this is going to sound, but please take this feedback in consideration for making a fanfic. From what I see on here, you need to write all your details and descriptions on your main Blog page for it, because the more we ask you questions, the added info you put in the comments makes it less about the source material, and more cryptic about what you're writing. Despite what you put above, we can't assume from the back of our heads that the Slicer is:

-A cyborg (okay, that one's not bad, but you could have mentioned that detail before).

-It doesn't use pheromones ( that already makes it less of a Big Daddy. Even Willbachbakal told you that pheremones are what help the Big Daddies protect and bond to the Little Sisters, especially since he knows his BioShock info and his sources). -More mentally conditioned just so it can recognize a failed robot (which you still didn't give a good answer to the Wikia Contribitor or me about fixing the robot, and the Big Daddies are mentally jacked up already).

-It's from the 21st century ( now that just throws everyone off, because you should have had a story made before making characters).

So technically, it doesn't seem related to a Big Daddy, but more of a futuristic Handyman that needs to be mentally altered to think it's a Big Daddy. Even with adding lot of abilities, weapons, or even changing the suit, if you're going to make it a Big Daddy, at least check the source material on the Big Daddy, since that's what every BioShock fan is familiar with. The same goes for the Robotic Little Sister, or anything big or small in BioShock to write a story or game. Speaking of which, we don't know if you're finishing it up, but either post up a story for BioShock Evolution, or put complete details on your blogs for your characters, weapons, enemies, and everything else. To us, your blogs about Splicers, Rapture, Tonics, and Big Daddies seem like they take place close to BioShock and BioShock 2, since none of us knew what you made was as far as the 21st century. Look up Charly Cohen or Lasmoor ( or Splicedupdrunk, or whatever he's calling himself on here) since they've been terrific at writting fanfics on here, their layouts are easy to follow, and they do stick with the source material. Once again, I know how rough it all sounds to you, but take it in consideration in making a fanfic.